A Bibliographic Analysis of Indoor Air Quality (IAQ) in Industrial Environments
, Antonio Maria Coruzzolo 1,*, Samuele Marinello 1, Asia Traini 1 and Rita Gamberini 1,2
Round 1
Reviewer 1 Report
Comments
L 14-15: You mention that 409 articles are used whereas only 140 are cited.
L 35-37: “are responsible” or “are supposed to be responsible”. If it is still a supposition, use the second form!
L 38-39: Homicides are not contributing to ill health! Review the logic of your text.
L 44: is responsible” or “is supposed to be responsible”. If it is still a supposition, use the second form!
L 106-107: As noted in the abstract 409 papers are used but only 140 are cited.
L 136: All the acronyms used need to be carefully defined, for example TPM is half defined, onl4.y 6 lines latter and VOC not all! This remark applied also to other numerous acronyms used in this text!
L 156-163: Not clear: there are 2 different graphs on Fig.3, which difference is not explained, either in the caption nor in the text?
L 165: Here and elsewhere, give the meaning of the numbers in the acronyms (for ex. PM2.5) when it first appears!
L 170: “The hazard quotient (HQ) due to PM2.5 …” or “The hazard quotient (HQ) associated to PM2.5”? You attribute very easily causalities!
L 186: Give the meaning of the numbers associated to PM in the caption of Fig.
L 271: “detection”.
L 273: Define “RVOCs and TVOCs”.
L 284-285: Repetition! Suppress the whole sentence: “The obtained results confirm this.”
L 470-497: The conclusion is very factual and gives a rather puzzling view of Indoor Air Quality in Industrial Environments. Based on this large bibliographic study, we would like the authors provide a more synthetic conclusion allowing to guide future researches in that field.
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Reviewer 2 Report
Dear Authors,
After reading your paper, I have some suggestions and advice.
Please put attention to the corruption problem. In the introduction, where the authors mention poor (low-income) countries, it is also worth noting the problem of corruption. I suggest you read the article Environmental pollution as a threats to the ecology and development in Guinea Conakry. Environmental Protection and Natural Resources/Ochrona Środowiska i Zasobów Naturalnych, 28(4), 27-32. There is also often a feeling among the inhabitants that the situation of pollution and economic problems is normal for developing countries.
The authors wrote about Ethiopia. Please note that the population in Ethiopia is 115 million, therefore 174,000 jobs are a fraction of a percent. Please verify data using official sources. It is impossible for the textile industry to generate only 174,000 jobs.
In this sentence please make citation: The data indicate that poor air quality is one of the largest envi- 50 ronmental contributors to the poor health of individuals. Maybe the Authors can read Indoor air pollution in developing countries: a major environmental and public health challenge. Bulletin of the World Health Organization, 78(9), 1078-1092. or others
Please complete the mentioned issues: corruption, and the mentality of societies in low-developed countries, and check the data on Ethiopia.
Author Response
Thank you for the time you dedicated to reviewing the paper and for the valuable advice you provided to improve its quality.
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Reviewer 3 Report
Review
A Bibliographic Analysis of Indoor Air Quality (IAQ) in Industrial Environments
Authors Francesco Lolli Antonio Maria Coruzzolo , Samuele Marinello, Asia Traini, Rita Gamberini
Abstract: Lines 10-21
Please structure the Abstract as:
Introduction-Aims
Method
Results and interpretation
Method is not well reflected in the abstract. Please revise
-Introduction lines 25-76
Literature review should be updated to 2022 and internationalized
Please analyses critically the findings of the articles and the limitations.
Please indicate also at least tree similar article to your research published recently (last 5 years).
Aim of the study is not very well expressed. Please revise
Material and Method
Flowchart of the used methodology is required, please insert
Table 2-line 120: data source to be inserted and please update the data to 2022
Table 3 line 121-please insert the datasource.
Results and discussion
Fig 2. Line 131. Please insert the datasource. On the horizontal axis please type correct the chemical formula of the pollutants (e.g. NO2 not NO2)
Fig. 3, line 163. Please insert the datasource
Fig. 4 line 186-idem
Fig 5 line 205 idem
Fig 6 line 221 idem
Table 5 line 262 . Please insert the datsource
Please improve the subchapter
Conclusions lines 471-497: this subchapter should be enlarged; it is too short and should be very comprehensive also for the large public. Results of this work will help improve the understanding of influencing factors in urban environment milieu for human community.
References: enlarge, internationalize and update the references to 2022
We consider relevant for your study also the following published articles. Please see and cite also:
Ilieș, D.C.; Marcu, F.; Caciora, T.; Indrie, L.; Ilieș, A.; Albu, A.; Costea, M.; Burtă, L.; Baias, Ș.; Ilieș, M.; Sandor, M.; Herman, G.V.; Hodor, N.; Ilieș, G.; Berdenov, Z.; Huniadi, A.; Wendt, J.A. Investigations of Museum Indoor Microclimate and Air Quality. Case Study from Romania. Atmosphere 2021, 12, 286. https://doi.org/10.3390/atmos12020286
Caciora, T.; Herman, G.V.; Ilieș, A.; Baias, Ș.; Ilieș, D.C.; Josan, I.; Hodor, N. The Use of Virtual Reality to Promote Sustainable Tourism: A Case Study of Wooden Churches Historical Monuments from Romania. Remote Sens. 2021, 13, 1758. https://doi.org/10.3390/rs13091758
Is it relevant and
interesting?
The paper is relevant for post pandemic period and not only. It synthetizes the actual available literature data. The paper results contribute to reflect the real dimensions and conditions observed industrial environments.
How original is the topic?
Is an actual topic even it is not very original; but important subject especially in the post pandemic period
What does it add to the subject
area compared with other published material?
The paper should be better documented (number of 141 scientific published articles in references list for a paper who dealt with A Bibliographic Analysis), very few updated to 2022.
Is the paper well written?
The paper is well written. The quality of English translation is good.
Is the text clear and easy to read?
The text is well structured, clear and easy to read from the specialists in the field but as well as from the persons from public.
Are the conclusions consistent with the evidence and arguments presented?
The conclusions should be better represented in the paper. The authors must underline the pollutants form atmosphere etc influencing factors in urban industrial environment milieu, especially for the human community.
Author Response
Thank you for the time you dedicated to reviewing the paper and for the valuable advice you provided to improve its quality.
Author Response File: Author Response.pdf
Round 2
Reviewer 2 Report
Dear Authors, thank you for revised paper. Now it is correct. Congratulation
