Performance-Influencing Factors and Improvement Paths of Third-Party Governance Service Regarding Environmental Pollution—An Empirical Study of the SEM Based on Shanghai Data
Shibly Shahrier
Round 1
Reviewer 1 Report
Comments on the paper entitled ``Performance Influencing Factors and Improvement Paths of Environmental Pollution Third-party Governance Service--An Empirical Study of AMOS Model Based on Shanghai Data’’ submitted to the journal ``Sustainability.’’
The paper examines the performance of a third-party governance service for environmental pollution control in China. The topic itself may be considered interesting. However, I propose a rejection as the paper is very poorly written. I have lost my motivation to read other parts of the paper after reading the abstract, introduction and literature review sections. The paper is not readable. It seems like the entire paper is translated into English from another language using a translation service. Most of the sentences are too long with improper use of punctuations. Sometimes, no punctuation is used between two sentences (I do not get how many sentences are included in lines 65-71). The prepositions needed within a sentence are sometimes missing. Besides, I face difficulty to link sentences while I read the paper.
The abstract and introduction sections are poorly motivated and written. The abstract does not present any research findings. It only explains the procedure of conducting the research. Terminologies used in the abstract are unknown to the general readers, such as the ``idea of sustainability science (2.0)’’ or a ``Pressure-State-Response (PSR).’’ The introduction section points out many problems regarding the existing policies for ``environmental pollution third-party governance service’’ as the major motivation for examining its performance. I do not consider it as a strong background behind conducting the research. In the literature review section, the authors frequently swap the findings from the past studies and their hypotheses.
Reviewer 2 Report
Please edit the text on line 144. Within the figures, please edit formula b) as it is illegible. Clarify the text in sections 175-215 as the text precedes the formula.Please edit the text on line 144. In my opinion, it would be appropriate to write th end of thise article with a comprehensive conclusion.
