Waimānalo Pono Research: Indigenizing Community-Engaged Research with a Native Hawaiian Community

Round 1

Reviewer 1 Report

Kia ora

Many thanks for the invitation to review the paper.  It was an excellent read, providing a good foundation/context for the research and I think it will be useful for other Indigenous communities who wish to lead/partner/participate in research.

General comments:

1.       Citations start as numbering then another referencing style is used – please be consistent.

2.       The discussion was very short.  It provided a summary of the themes and demonstrated links with already published work but I would have liked to see:

a.       how these findings are unique and add to our knowledge/understanding

b.       evidence for successful outcomes as a result of research Waimānalo Pono research, especially with regards to the three priorities (traditional medicine, health eating and limu restoration).

A few specific suggestions here:

Page 1

·       Line 7 remove were

·       Line 8 remove who

·       Line 9 remove ‘Forces of’

·       Line 10 capitalise Indiegnous

·       Line 12, borne not born

·       Line 15 use full wording for CBPR

·       Line 26 capitalise White

·       Line 39 gap between Hawaiian and language

·       Line 43 change men to people or businesses

Page 2

·       Line 83 remove second ‘traditional’

·       Line 86/7 add something linking these conditions to poor nutrition

·       Line 117 full stop after first ‘Native Hawaiians’. Then “More than 600…live on….”

·       Line 123 reference?

·       Line 124 remove organizing

·       Line 132 remove subsistence

Page 4

·       Line 161 reference Smith Decolonising Methodologies

·       Lines 170, 71 and 74 change quotations marks to inverted commas

·       Lines 183-6 need reference if quoting

Page 5

·       Line 201 gap between and and ocean

·       Line 206 use full wording for CBPR when introducing it for the first time

·       Line 211 remove ‘everyday’

·       Line 214-5 consider change to “where research proposals are discussed and updates on …. Are provided”.

·       Line 219 spelling of Civic

·       Line 22 change to to with

·       Line 229 change included to including

·       Line 230 change ask to asked

·       Line 232 seems to be a large space

·       Line 233 unsure what litserv means.  Also says August 2022 here but 2020 on line 227 – please check

·       Line 240 change to Results

·       Line 243, if introduced earlier don’t need full wording for CBPR here

·       Line 249 capitalise Indigenous

Page 6

·       Line 260 change born to borne or consider using started or commenced

·       Lines 265-9 change to “Importantly for this community, indigenizing research required a social justice approach, prioritized community, applied a critical lens to the potential harm of research to both individuals and to the wider collective, and would contribute to developing community capacity, building on community strengths, knowledge and perspectives”.

·       Line 276 culturally?

·       Line 281 change to “any research proposal to the community may be declined because it is not safe or relevant”.

·       Lines 281-91 used the word ‘pitch’ a lot here.  Consider other wording eg brought, considered, proposed

Page 7

·       Line 320 add organization after non-profit?

·       Lines 321-2 “houses and owns” – please explain/elaborate

·       Line 324 – capital for Indigenous

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Reviewer 2 Report

Theme 1: Indigenizing research through the ʻāina                                                                Theme 2: Pilina as the heart of all successful and effective research partnerships                Theme 3: Consent must be interwoven in every step of the research process.                Theme 4: Recognize the value of community knowledge with equitable resources                Theme 5: Data sovereignty is vital in telling our own stories

Clear, succinct and visionary understanding of the potential of Indigenous thinking in the rejuvenation of research within communities and society.  I appreciate the lucid summary of Hawaiian history that dovetailed within a contemporary response. This was an honor to read. The key for this kind of research was indeed linking people to the healing of land/ ocean/water. This form of mutual causality activates pilina/healing/growth in our lives. Brilliant and necessary.  I look forward to sharing this article with our classes and future scholar-practitioners.

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